Reflection

Part 1
Reflection
My first piece of writing was about the scarlet letter. I wrote about the changing personalities of Pearl and Dimmesdale. Mrs. Turner wrote on my paper telling me to prove just how Pearl expresses her love for Dimmesdale. I took her advice and changed it to prove how Pearl expressed her love for Dimmesdale. While we were reading the book, we learned about dark romanticism. The dark romanticism idea was during Hawthorne's time. The idea was that life was colorful, capricious and contradictory to dark Romans. We learned about thesis statement, which is a intrest-catching sentence. I have learned about brushstrokes and how they improve my paper. I also learned about transitions and how to change from one paragraph to another.
My second piece of writing was about nature. We went on a nature walk and shared something that represented transcendentalism. I wrote about the ways to view nature and how i saw nature. I learned about the views of transcendentalism. Transcendentalism is a view that everything in the world, including human beings, is a reflection of the Divine Soul. Also the physical facts of the natural world are a doorway to the spiritual or ideal world. Two people who believe in the transcendentalism view were Emerson and Thoreau. They were both writers. This has to be my favorite writing out of the ones that I wrote.

Part 2
Both of my pieces needed revision. In my scarlet letter essay, i needed to prove better that Pearl loved Dimmesdale. I revised by saying "She ran to him, fell upon him, and began to sob onto her father because she realized that he loved her and that she could truely love him too." In my nature essay i needed a thesis statement. I wrote, "Transcendentalism is a beautiful view." Also on my nature essay i revised the part with shady and changed it to Shady. When i was talking about my story i took out the part that said,"and i will type it out." I made these revisions because i felt that they were nessasary to put in.

Part 3
From Meredith Alewine's blog, I learned that you need to be more descriptive in your writing (http://meredith92.blogspot.com/). She starts her nature essay by saying, "I've never expected that a peaceful walk through the woods to turn into me cringing in pain because I just stepped in a briar patch roughly the size of my head." I like her use of comparison from the briar patch to her head. It is amussing and makes you want to continue reading. I know that if i add more description people will want to continue reading like i wanted to on Merediths'. In Brooke Oxendine's blog, I read her first sentence and was amazed with the intellegence of her words(http://brookeworks.blogspot.com/). I learned that bigger words can bring out your writing to make it more attractive. Savanna's blog also has a very descriptive essay(http://savannakeown.blogspot.com/). The first sentence is, "I slid on my white karate uniform, clean and crisp, while my heart pounded." This sentence has so many details that gives you the image of her feelings.